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Clever title and opening: Theodora: (title)Real
Races for Real Rewards
(opening) Have you ever seen the poster: “MOST WANTED – PRIZE
$1,000,000” to ask people for help to catch the targeted criminal?
Fariba:
[title]
Is America Blessed or Cursed?
[last line of paper] I wonder if America
is blessed or cursed.
Truly intriguing opening: Olive: President
Bush is risking the future of the United
States.
Good documentation of
paraphrases:
Carrie:
Peters also argues that the company should give positive
reinforcement to workers, so they can do better jobs (4). He thinks that companies should share the
success with workers (6).
Great logical and critical
thinking: Vivian: Knock,
Knock, who’s there? Your good friend Great
Britain! . . . I bet many
nations out there asked themselves, why they aren’t the “truer friend” to the U.S.
because I certainly don’t know what’s required of me to be the chosen one. It’s true that Great
Britain has been the nation that
has supported the U.S.
in this fight throughout, but during a crisis like this it’s very inappropriate
to mention your best friend, because it wasn’t only British and American people
who died; it was people from eighty different nations. God bless America<,
God bless the Queen? What about the rest
of the world, God curse them?
Hanh: [After
quoting from G. W. Bush’s speech the section about how the terrorists hate our
freedoms:] In my opinion, besides the reason cited, the other is that we have
blocked their ways to Afghanistan, and by this ramp, to their resources in the
Middle East. Stanley: Since some companies have almost no positive
reinforcement, the problem of lack of balance between positive reinforcement
and negative reinforcement is the actual largest business problem in the U.S.
Marissa:
I work harder when working with my personal
interest. I took an art history test
today. I did a lot of research for this
test beforehand. I found that this was
my first time doing so much preparation for an exam. I was because I have really fallen in love
with my art history class. Austin: I
am not sure why Al Qaeda attached the United States, maybe because of their
opulence (since they attacked the Twin Towers, a symbol of wealth and trade),
or maybe because of the power of the United States, which has spread over the
world and affects most countries in the world (the attack on the Pentagon, a
sign of the U.S. military), but I am sure that freedom is not the only reason.
Donald:
[disagrees with Volk that good things in life have
nothing to do with technology] At least for me and most of the international
students in my writing class, they depend on communication technologies such as
international calls, email, and video conferencing to have their hearts
connected with their families overseas. Astounding fact:
Saravanan: I
have a record of my computer running Linux for seven months without a reboot or
any problems.
Good
analysis: Marta:
In the
article, “Technology Makes Me Mad,” Patricia Volk expresses with a sarcastic
tone the frustration that she feels when using technology in her life.
Well-developed
example:
My
Hanh: On July 13, 2003, Tran Thi Bich Cau, a 25-year-old mother of two
boys, was shot and killed by San Jose Police a short time after their arrival
at her apartment. According to Chad Marshall’s oral deposition, Ms. Tran was threatening to stab him with a
knife, so he shot her for self-defense.
However, in truth, Ms. Tran was holding a vegetable peeler pointing at the
police officers.
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